Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Immoral Behavior in Public. You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below: 1.我们经常在公共场合见到各种不道德的行为,叙述你的一次相关经历。 2.这些不文明行为会有哪些影响。 3.我们应该怎样改善这种现象。 ●审题概述●
To witness 1immoral behavior in public, one need only visit the Beijing subway. I still remember the first time I took the Beijing subway. It was an early morning. I was in a hurry to go to school. When I was trying to get a ticket, I found a lot of people waiting in front of me, but nobody was in the line.
1Immoral behaviors in public 2initiate a series of problems. One of the most serious ones is that it may exert a negative impact on our 3sense of social responsibility. We will keep ignoring other people’s rights and feelings, and in turn, we too will be disrespected some day.
The reform of1 this phenomenon is certainly not easy. With an eye on practical 2implementation and 3cost effectiveness , I propose that society make it clear in every way that people who fail to respect the ④common good will be seriously punished. Stricter policies for this should be made to correct this phenomenon as soon as possible.
We all expect “A World without Thieves". Everyone 1shares the huge responsibility of 2demonstrating his or her justice at the proper time. Personal responsibility is vital to build a harmonious socialist society.
◇第一段思路点评:
作文要求第一点,相关经历
◇语言点提示:
1 immoral behavior in public:直接点题
◇第二段思路点评:
不文明行为的影响
◇语言点提示:
1 immoral behavior in public:重复名词词组,与第一段衔接
2 initiate:意思是“产生,发动”
3sense of social responsibility:意思是“社会责任感”
◇第三段思路点评:
如何改善这些现象
◇语言点提示:
1 this phenomenon:指代前文“immoral behavior in public”, 与上文衔接,且避免重复